This is my 100WC. Remember, if you get to my post in the first 60 minutes, you have a chance of having this featured in my next post.
It all began when Levi told William to go with him. They walked into a large mansion, and as soon as they entered, the door shut behind them. That's when he began to feel ill. He heard someone laugh, and could have sworn he saw something above him in a chandelier. He hears the laugh again, and something swoops at him from the chandelier. You run up to the staircase, and bound up it as fast as your legs can carry you. You enter a room and slam the door shut behind you, and wonder what you can do now.
I like the energy you manage to convey in your story, but am not sure who all of the characters. Levi and William are clear, but then is one of them 'he' or is that someone else? Then I'm in the story. Then again, maybe that sense of confusion is intentional for your reader as it adds to the our sense of confusion... either way well done.
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